Query Letter Writing: My Favorite Links
I’ve written other posts about my own process for both Finding an Agent, learning to write Query Letters and the framework I’ve used to help writers with their back flap copy and queries, but here’s a list of the resources I most often direct other writers to when they ask me for help with their query letters. Most of these are also linked in the posts above, but I thought it might be nice to have all my favorite links all in one place.
The Query Shark: I basically learned how to write a query from studying all of the examples and critiques and advice on this blog. It is my all-time favorite resource.
Jane Friedman’s Complete Guide to Query Letters: Jane Friedman is widely respected and she updates the information on her query letter page regularly. It’s full of great advice and resources.
Quite the Query: This is Amy Trueblood’s archive of successful query letters from writers in a variety of genres. I think it is so helpful to study queries that worked and see how they both stick to the form and deviate from it, to see what YOU gravitate towards in a query and where you get bored.
Libbie Hawker’s YouTube videos on writing back flap copy and query letters: The same methods work for both!
Writing Your Novel’s Back Flap Copy
One of the writers I work with recently asked me for help in writing the back flap copy for the novel she just finished revising. While I’ve helped plenty of writers with their queries, and given informal feedback on back flap copy in some of the online groups I belong to, this was a new formal request and so I set about researching a bit more on the subject.
Writing back flap copy– if you intend to self-publish your novel–is an exercise in writing advertising copy for your book. It’s not entirely dissimilar from writing a query letter, in that both forms require that you “sell” (not summarize!) your book in a very economical way.
I found tons of resources out there about writing back flap copy (sometimes called “blurbs”–though I don’t like that term because in traditional publishing, a blurb is a quote from another author endorsing a novel–usually by gushing about what they loved about it), and distilled what I gleaned from those resources I found most helpful into the information below– which I sent to my client along with links to those original sources, too. I’ll include all that here, for you.
Steps for Writing Your Novel’s Back Flap Copy
Think of your blurb as ad copy that is going to convince readers to buy your product.
Step 1: Read the back flap copy of bestselling books within your genre (Amazon can help with this!). Notice how each includes a main character…who wants something (desire)… but encounters an opposing force (conflict)….struggles against that force… and must take risks or make difficult choices about continuing the struggle (stakes). Make sure you look at self-published novels and not just traditionally published ones, because the marketing often is different. In particular, notice if your genre uses hooks (more on this in Step 5).
Step 2: Use the “This story is about…” exercise to remind yourself of what your novel is
about. Write 5 sentences that begin “This story is about…” and finish the sentence
a different way each time.
Step 3: Create a Framework for your blurb (inspired by Libbie Hawker’s YouTube videos on writing blurbs and queries, this guest post on Jane Friedman’s blog, Jane Friedman’s guide to writing query letters and the Query Shark’s blog ) by answering the following questions as simply and briefly as possible:
1. Who is your main character?
2. What does your main character want?
3. Why does she want it?
4. What stands in your character’s way and keeps her from getting what she wants?
5. What will your character sacrifice in order to get what s/he wants? (In other words:
what’s at stake if your character fails? What difficult choices must she make?)
If you’re struggling with this question, here’s another quick template:
e. The main character must choose Path A or Path B
f. If she chooses Path A, the dire consequences, outcome, or peril she
faces are:
g. If she chooses Path B, the even more dire consequences, outcome,
or peril she faces are:
h. What will she have to give up to get what she wants/achieve her
goal?
Step 4: Draft your flap copy using your answers to the above framework to guide you. Aim for 150 words. You can add some “sizzle” (or “meat” as Libbie Hawker calls it) to your framework at this point, but keep your focus on the following 3 things in this order. The order is important, so that within the blurb you build toward the payoff (which is the reader is so curious, they must buy your book to find out how it turns out).
1. The protagonist: Give the reader a character she can connect with. In presenting your
protagonist, focus on the psychology rather than physicality—so wants/desires,
misbeliefs/flaws, personality traits and emotions. If you’re going to add some “sizzle”
or detail, the character description is a good place to do it because you want readers
to connect with your protagonist. Remember—we connect more easily with emotion-based
traits, and emotions make us buy things.
2. The struggle: Present a conflict the reader can relate to. The character must be facing a
plot problem that is more than an average problem with an obvious solution. If the plot
problem is incredibly unique, you can focus on how the protagonist feels about having
to face this problem.
3. The stakes: The consequences and/or risks must be intriguing because the reader’s desire
to know how the protagonist is going to solve their problem and what it is going to
cost them is the *trigger* for making the purchase.
4. The sizzle: Add in a few brushstrokes of detail to highlight the setting, the character,
your style.
Step 5 (Optional): Add a “hook.” It’s just a very catchy sentence (or sometimes several very short sentences) that goes at the beginning of the blurb to generate curiosity and grab readers’ interest by making them want to know more about your story. It might:
1. Highlight the unusual, strange, unique or dangerous elements, objects or
intriguing events of your story.
2. Be an evocative tagline or quote.
3. Function as a newspaper headline for your novel.
4. Be a shocking or unusual takeaway from the story.
Write the body of your blurb first so you know what details to focus on here—the hook should directly connect to the points covered in your blurb. Keep it short and snappy.
EXAMPLES (with a caveat—what I see for self-published novels are often quite
a bit shorter, often almost a list or series of fragments, set apart from the main body of blurb, often in bold. They’re sometimes similar to this one I just made up: “a dragon, a possessed sword, and a power that can’t be contained”):
Harry Potter has never played a sport while flying on a broomstick. He’s never
worn an invisibility cloak, befriended a giant, or helped hatch a dragon. (Harry
Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone, by JK Rowling)
Winning means fame and fortune. Losing means certain death. The Hunger
Games have begun… (The Hunger Games, by Suzanne Collins)
To five-year-old Jack, Room is the entire world. (Room, by Emma Donoghue)
You don’t know her. But she knows you. (Girl on a Train, by Paula Hawkins)
A royal scandal’s connection to a brutal serial killer threatens London…
(A Murderous Relation, by Deanna Raybourn)
Members of an Egyptian expedition fall victim to an ancient mummy’s curse…
(A Treacherous Curse, by Deanna Raybourn)
A dozen women join a secret 1850s Arctic expedition—and a sensational murder
trial unfolds when some of them don’t come back. (The Arctic Fury, by Greer
Macallister)
Wolf by Wolf: One girl’s mission to win a race and kill Hitler (Wolf by Wolf, by
Ryan Graudin)
For your blurb, AVOID:
1. Backstory: If a key backstory detail is necessary to understand the plot, mention it in
nothing more than a short phrase.
2. Subplots: Presenting subplots confuses the reader. Keep your focus on the main plot within
your primary genre (so, even if there is a strong romance subplot, if your primary
genre is sci-fi or mystery, keep your focus on that genre/that plotline).
3. Details: ONLY include crucial details that directly affect the plot. Excessive details
confuse or bore the reader. The fun of reading the novel is discovering all the
details. Specific details to AVOID are:
a. Proper nouns: Names, titles, locations, objects and organizations belong
in the novel, not the blurb. Limit names to the protagonist whenever
possible. If you must, you can offer the names of a villain, a sidekick,
what the protagonist is fighting for, a crucial location/setting. Anyone
else should be mentioned by their relationship to the protagonist (mother,
fiancé, aunt, friend, neighbor). ONLY mention those characters directly
involved with the plot.
b. Any term or content that requires definition or explanation in order to
understand it. Your focus should be on plot and what happens.
4. Lists: These are reserved for non-fiction.
5. Cliches: You want readers to think your story is fresh!
6. Overselling: Readers are often turned off by any hint of a hard sales pitch.
7. Repetition: Edit out any repetitive information/detail. Your blurb should be a concise and
tight as possible.
8. Spoilers
Black Lives Matter
The news this week. The videos (George Floyd being murdered, Christian Cooper being accosted while birding). I just can’t stay silent. I despair over what is happening—*has always been happening*—in this country.
As someone who studies history and writes historical fiction, the past is always happening now. To be more specific: I recently read about the Colonial era Slave Codes. Have you ever read them? I certainly never did in school. They are ugly. They are hard. While I have been working on my current novel, which is set during the Revolutionary War, the blatant hypocrisy of so many of the “Patriots” has been very difficult to navigate and portray—how could they fight for Liberty and Justice and at the same time enslave people?
When I was working on I SHALL BE NEAR TO YOU, I also read the Washington DC Slave Codes—I then went on to mostly sidestep the issue of slavery in the novel (because it was ugly, because it was hard, because the book was too long and some scenes got cut, and– because real Rosetta did not write about slavery in her letters– I gave myself a pass). That is something I wish I had done better at trying to address. I am trying to do better in my current novel. When you get to read it, we will talk at book club about how I did, I hope.
Anyway. I digress.
What I found when I read the Slave Codes was shocking to me. The vast system that we put in place to maintain the system of slavery. The *detailed minutiae* of it. The brutality. But even more: The way it is still with us today. There are specific codes about what police could do to enslaved people—what they could get away with. Anything, really. Murder most certainly. The past, made present.
I am going to link to some texts below—-what I’ve read related to the slave codes, Ta-Nehisi Coates’ brilliant article making the case for reparations, and Annette Gordon-Reed’s book about the Hemmings family. These are all things I have read, mostly while doing research for my novels. They each opened my eyes to the waves of the past that are Right Now washing over this nation. I hope you’ve already read some of what I’m posting. I hope you’ll read the things you haven’t. I hope you’ll share with me the things you’ve read, the things that have helped you think about what keeps happening in this country. I hope you’ll tell me what you found eye-opening, what you found shocking, what parts of the past you see in our present. I hope if we sit with the hard stuff and look at the ugly stuff, we can do better– we can STOP it from continuing to happen, to continue being written in our history.
The Slave Code in Colonial New York by Edwin Olson
New York had more enslaved people than any other northern colony. Revolutionary War era newspapers (The Royal Gazette of New York in particular) are full of ads for human beings. Also— enslaved people were often referred to as servants (gotta hide the ugly truth)— which makes it hard now to tell whether certain people were in fact enslaved, indentured, or free.
The Statutory Law of Slavery and Race in the Thirteen Mainland Colonies of British America by William M. Wiecek
An essay comparing Colonial era Slave Codes (you can read it online free, if you create a JSTOR account. I love JSTOR).
the Washington DC Slave Codes
They were considered lenient.
The Case for Reparations by Ta-Nehisi Coates
If I were still teaching, I would teach this. I think it is brilliant and ought to be required reading for every American who didn’t live the experience he details.
The Hemingses of Monticello by Annette Gordon-Reed
This book taught me so much and made Sally Hemings—the choices she made—so real, so complex, so heartbreaking. If you follow my Author page on Facebook, then you know how I feel about Thomas Jefferson (tl;dr: least favorite Founding Father…), but this book helped me understand his hypocrisy in a far more nuanced way. The book is enormous. I listened to it on audio.
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Face In A Book
This interview with The 1619 Project founder Nikole Hannah-Jones and The Daily Show’s Trevor Noah.
Nikole Hannah-Jones does a beautiful job discussing why it’s so important that we begin tracing the effects of slavery forward to our present.
True Bits: Lemonade
Recently a reader asked me whether the lemonade that shows up twice in I Shall Be Near To You was historically accurate. The short answer is yes! The longer answer is a little more complicated.
The account of the soldiers being offered lemonade by citizens of Maryland as they marched toward Antietam comes straight out of Landscape Turned Red: The Battle of Antietam by Stephen W. Sears, the main source I relied on for my information about Antietam. In it, Major John M. Gould of the 10th Maine is quoted as having written in his diary, “The women and young ladies opened their doors and windows to give us bread and butter, meat, apples, peaches, and preserves!” Sears adds that, “There were washtubs of cold water and lemonade at front gates along the roadside…” That little tidbit became the inspiration for the scene in the novel. Interestingly, while working on the answer to this question, I did more research (better late than never!) and came across the Civil War diary of Private Charles C. Perkins, a bugler in the 1st Massachusetts Infantry Regiment, written while he was on the Peninsula Campaign in June 1862. He recounts several purchases of lemons (at a price of two for 25 cents on one occasion and three for 17 cents on another) and sugar to make lemonade.
Now, the accuracy of the lemonade that Rosetta’s mama makes during haying is a bit more slippery. The honest answer is that I made it up. That said, according to The Land Where Lemons Grow: The story of Italy and its Citrus Fruit by Helena Atlee, by 1862 there were regular steamships transporting lemons from Italy to New York. Now, would any of those lemons actually made it out to Flat Creek? Well, with the canal nearby in Utica, it’s possible, and the nice thing about historical fiction is I can deal in possibilities. Would Rosetta’s family have spent the money to buy lemons? That seems less likely. I prefer to imagine that they might have had a lemon tree planted in a protected spot in the kitchen garden. It’s possible, right?
Who would ever have thought there was so much research behind such a simple detail like lemonade! It’s a perfect example of how, when writing historical fiction, you never know what you don’t know until you’re in the middle of a scene.
Witness Trees
(**I’ve tried to minimize any Spoilers here, but if you haven’t finished reading I Shall Be Near To You yet, SPOILER ALERT**)
In honor of Arbor Day, I thought I’d write a little bit about trees…
In November of 2008, I came across Bob Hicok’s poem “What I Know For Sure” in that month’s edition of Oprah magazine and was introduced to the idea of the witness trees at Antietam and Appomattox. I had not yet written the battle scenes in I Shall Be Near To You, but I knew they were coming, and I knew some of what would happen– had already written much of *that* scene at Antietam, in fact– although I didn’t yet know it would happen at Antietam. But the idea of witness trees stuck with me. Reading Hicok’s poem was the first I’d heard that phrase, in fact, and I tore the poem out and posted it to the bulletin board that was above my desk at the time. When I finally got to *that* scene at Antietam, the idea of a witness tree had taken root, and I have Bob Hicok’s poem to thank for the idea of Jeremiah’s tree.
In my search for a link to the poem, I also came across photographer Nate Larson’s poignant series of portraits of the remaining Witness Trees— the only survivors of the Civil War still living. Aren’t they beautiful?